Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you think these people deserve such high salaries? Use spesific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
In today’s World, people earn Money legally or illegally. The people, who have dedicated themselves to their jobs like athletes, actors, singers etc. They deserve the Money that they earn. Those people spend their life in front of cameras and also they make people happy with the entertainments of their life. They might also have bad conditions to achieve their current situation.
Imagining the idea that living all my life in front of cameras and magazines do not seem good but these are the consequences of being a famous person. Famous people like singers, athletes, and actors don’t have privacy. Whenever all the journalists see them, they will record them through cameras. Therefore, they can compensate for that Money their freedom.
Being in front of the camera is a difficult task. They are trying to entertain and draw people’s attention. A good entertainment deserves a good feedback and also it deserves to be paid. These people expend energy on their shows, tv programs or movies. They achieve a good carrier which is mean they are shining on the stage.
Some of these famous people had bad conditions in their previous life where they were not famous. They worked quite a lot to achieve their fame. Maybe they were a deprivation of good quality of life. Above all, they were not rich or neither working in well-payed jobs. Due to these facts, they should be paid well.
When everything is taken into account, some famous people deserve to live a good life and earn a lot of Money concerning their achievement, their previous conditions and the lack of privacy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 268.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96268656716 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56592733134 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533582089552 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3075749672 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.5 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.4 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.95 5.45110844103 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126950180389 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046605691012 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466201899854 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0880705185194 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0161831798818 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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