Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When it comes to the issue that parents offer their school age children money for each high mark they get in school is a great idea, some people may agree with this idea and give us sound reasons for their beliefs. On the other hand, some other people might disagree and have different opinion. Also, those opponents could provide us with strong purposes to support their thoughts. I believe that the money reward for a high mark that the children get in the school is a great idea because there are so many reasons. This short essay will demonstrate some points regarding my point of view in the following paragraph:
First of all, in my opinion, it is widely understood that the reward has great impact on the children. If the child receives sum of money for the high mark that he gets, that will motivate him to study well and doing his best. Eventually, that will be very pleasant for his parents. However, ignore the child great accomplishes will frustrate him and never push him to do his best.
Another point why I advocate that giving the children sum of money for each great mark is very useful because it builds the child’s personality. The life today is very hard and the children should learn during their early life stages hoe to earn and save the money. If child learns that he has to work hard in order to get the money, he will learn how to manage his time and resources to reach his goal. On the other hand, if the child does not learn how to solve the money problems when he is young, he will face many troubles in the future.
Finally, it is a well-established fact that giving the children money for each good mark they get in the school is very important. The rapid development of the technology today makes the child’s requirement increase. So, giving the child money for his effort will help him to know how to get his requirements by saving money. Eventually, that will decrease the parents’ responsibilities to provide what their children need. However, depending on the parent to buy what the child need, will make the child irresponsible and less dependent.
From what has been discussed above, we may draw a conclusion which says that, people who hold opposite idea may have the right to believe in that, but my opinion and other people opinions are overwhelmingly too much to be ignored.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, regarding, so, well, as to, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1934.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67149758454 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49502761126 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480676328502 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7896761775 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.444444444 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61111111111 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307909153229 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10363826959 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12403609516 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16328721946 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136810699981 0.0645574589148 212% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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