Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
In general, praising or punishing a child directly seems to be the most effective strategy as parents say. There may be several reasons for this; It is the easiest way to react to an action, no matter it is about the school grades or behavioral problems. Besides, there's no need for any special training and therefore it does not cost much. But in long-term, there are some side effects which most parents are not aware of.
Most people assume side effects to be related to punishments but actually praising a child so directly results in a new form of punishment which is lack of praise. If children get used to being offered money or presents for whatever preferable thing they do, They would feel depressed when they are not praised. Also they will become conditional. They can no more distinguish what is good to do and what is not. The only thing that helps them understand whether what they have done is wrong or right, is whether they get punishment or presents afterwards. They will lose the ability to find wrong and right things independently which may result in many disorders when they grow up.
Offering a school-age child money for each high mark is just a good example. Such students may never find internal motivations for studying and may never understand why everyone tries to get high marks in exams, even though they themselves are trying to do so. Parents may think offering money may help their children be more successful but in reality, their children will be good students until they find some other attractive work to do. Unfortunately, not all attractive activities are beneficial to the society and since such a teenager is not capable of distinguishing right and wrong due to his parents' behavior, he may do useless or dangerous things to both himself and the society.
As a whole, if one day I become a mother, I will never offer money to my children because of school marks.
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- TPO 42 Integrated Writing Task 85
- TPO 54 3
- Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea? 70
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- TPO-54 - Independent Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...grades or behavioral problems. Besides, theres no need for any special training and th...
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Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...el depressed when they are not praised. Also they will become conditional. They can ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, if, may, so, therefore, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75675675676 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59700560874 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54954954955 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4463801913 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.6 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26666666667 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373944221875 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119986209723 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111447500299 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205498194197 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0916533139037 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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