Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, children's education has been a paramount issue for parents. They are highly curious about the ways to be able to help in improving children's education. Its importance leads to some controversy; some people want to know how to regard their children's grades. One statement in this case that is often brought up is that giving children money due to their grade is not a right way, in contrast, I personally offer the opposite. In the lines to follow, I will investigate two reasons to shed light on my response.
One of the paramount reasons which deserves to be mentioned for is that giving children money would be an incentive. It goes without saying that children are enthusiastic when they receive money and spend it by buying toys. Moreover, getting praise always encourage children struggling for receiving a better grade and the better reward. They think, the better the grade, the more money they would have. Take, for example, when I was a child, I extremely loved a watch. I found it a way to prove to others that I am deserving to have it. When my father told me should I get a high score, he would buy me a watch. Therefore, I strived hard all day long in order to achieve a high score. On the contrary, when my father decided to stop this reward, I cooled off.
Another reason coming to mind is that giving children money is an opportunely to let them manage their money. Spending money would turn out a strategic decision for children are desiring to buy several things with a limit budget. They would figure out the priority in buying, struggling to grow their budget, and being affordable to provide themselves with everything they want. Take, for example, my boy and I had gone to the mall. He wanted to buy a toy car and a bicycle. What happened was that he hardly decided to by the car. Therefore, I realized that he would be able to make a more important decision in the future.
In conclusion, to sum both reasons up, parents should offer money as an incentive, children would allure into study hard. Giving children money lead children to be thrifty and studious.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, by and large, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61497326203 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53838951227 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53743315508 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.6657694178 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.0434782609 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2608695652 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5652173913 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23674172605 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680238281192 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488216546865 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157659421197 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032624899974 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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