Devotion children for their high score is crucial factor for educational program and their family because it can persuasive them for better efforting in the future. A question migh arise, with respect to this fact, whether money is a good prize for school-age children? As it is a moot point there might not be a general agreement on this topic.Personally, however, I rest on the belief that money can be a good candidate to pesruasive children to get high grade. In the following there are two reasons put forth to decline my personal perspective.
The first illustration which can demonstrate my opinion is that money allways can be a good incentive for anybody. Broadly speaking, all people work just for their salary. If they wouldnot to be , they donot try anymore. Nowadys, children know that all facilities and entertainment costs a lot. Therefore, they know the value of money, if the parents offer them money as reward for their grade, the certainly study better to achive in their exam. Hence, in the loge run this plan can be a good effect on children's learning process since they study better to gain more money. Money could be the best incentive for children that persuasive them to study because they know the better grade they get, the more money they earn.
The second demonstration which help me develop my view is that if childrens get money from earlier age they better learn the concept of responsibility. Generally speaking, they learn how to spend money and how to manage them. In essence, this approch can be help to behave more mature and learn to have a plan for their future. Moreover, manageing their money can help them to be more responsible from their family. To give a good example, If a child wants to buy a bicycle, he try to study hard and gain money; then he trys to manage his money for that bicycle independent of his family.
In the light of above-mentioend reasons, I am proponet of offering children money for their high grade because not only is it the best incentive and persuasive them for studing, but also it learn them how to be responeble for their future.That is why i recommend parents to admire their childrens high score by money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, broadly speaking, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74278215223 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65837277435 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475065616798 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9320499156 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.294117647 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4117647059 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285534158327 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105838484087 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585439733653 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203972457577 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376427287649 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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