Without a shadow of the doubt, education is the vehicle, which provides the knowledge at various aspects of the life and engages the students in a variety of topics. It is a controversial company whether parents give money to children as a token of encouraging after good grades or not. In my opinion, there are several ways to motivate students to get better marks, but not money. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following ways.
First and foremost, money itself proves that it can initiate other bad habits in the youngsters because the juvenile period is the critical period of life and they do not know how to use it. Sometimes youth starts taking drinks and other drugs, which are inappropriate things according to their age. My cousin’s experience is a compelling example of this. One of my cousins was a very bright student in the class and his parents always offered him a good amount of money when he won any project. Slowly and slowly, he developed this habit to ask more money from his guardians. Later on, his performance had started to decline dramatically and his parents found that he had become drug-addict and doing the party every night and they felt regret for giving money to enhance his motivation. So, money offering can lead to serious problems in pupil life
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Secondly, students start blackmailing their parents on every issue, even for a small work they ask for the money. In this way, they become very much introvert and self-fish. however, there are numerous other approaches by which we can boost their confidence. For instance, when students do their best in their exams, parents can give them presents which are related to their studies and can help them in higher studies, including any gadget like a laptop, and can plan a vacation with family. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Whenever I did the best job in my studies, my father used to take us for a holiday in some historical place. Furthermore, we were not only enjoyed the vacations but also gather remarkable information about the place. In this way, we enlarge the horizon of our knowledge as well retain that information for a lifetime.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that rendering money to the young ones to see the improvement is not the good idea, because it causes many bad effects in their life including drug-addiction, blackmailing, which can ruin the bright future of the students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82380952381 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68383745937 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552380952381 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.217780789 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.3 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211990659861 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636051116598 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033091943136 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121008879371 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349569534967 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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