There are myriad factors that parents should consider when they motivate their youngsters to become better human beings in their life. In my opinion, inspiring young ones towards part time jobs is a brilliant idea in order to overcome the challenges of the life.
First and foremost, part time jobs help the students in their future jobs and make them efficient in the office environment. The unemployment rate is highly increased from past few decades. Companies prefer individuals who has work experience in the particular field. If students do some job during weekends, it enhances the value of their resume as well as they become prepare to handle the work pressure at the workplace. My cousin’s experience is a compelling example of this. After high school, she joined a part time job at the local library, where she used to interact with kids and adults and also participated in book reading. After graduation, she applied for the job at different corporations and she got interview call from four out of five companies. Because of her experience at the previous job, she can well able to relate with other people and develop magnificent communication skills. On the other hand, her friends who had not done any extra job, were not able to express themselves fully. Moreover, there was no work experienced was added in their profile, so many companies did not even send interview letters. In that way, doing part time job helped her to choose her dream job.
Secondly, extra work apart from studies not only keeps the teenager busy, but also, they learn the value of self-efficient. Furthermore, they become more organized and independent. I remembered my dad convinced me to do a part-time job during my university days, I have joined evening job at local café and I was working four hours daily over there. My job made me so efficient that I was able to pay my semester fee and I did not take any debt from the bank. However, few of my friends used to do clubbing and gossiping in their free time and had not joined any work. After university, they were all under the bank-debt and bad habits of drinking made their situation even worse. In this way, my job made me more independent and responsible.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that inspiring the young kids to do extra job make them more capable, they become able to handle their responsibilities in their personal life as well as at the workplace.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, apart from, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2017.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83693045564 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71556448932 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529976019185 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6501841483 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0476190476 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215385739168 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066297250096 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535768092204 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136469112537 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314490575774 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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