Some parent offer their school age children money for each high grade they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Giving money as reward to children for their well behavior or good accomplishments at school is one the most common ways that parents use to show their satisfaction toward their kids. Some people think that money can be a right choice as a gift for children. While, some others believe that this is a bad idea and parents should not give money to their children. In my point of view, giving money to school age children would harm them in the future due to two serious reasons.
First, giving money to the kids for their good grades can deviate their behavior and create wrong expectations in them about their accomplishments in future when they grow older. Young adults are in a very delicate age, since they learn and adapt themselves to what they experience in their early life. Normally, they would try to replicate these actions and behaviors during their life especially when they become older. For example, my friend, Jim, learned in their family that it is OK that you insult somebody back who insults you at the first place which is totally wrong as we all know. But, his parents taught him that this action is completely acceptable and he adapt himself with this information and perception.
Second, it can affect their ability to contribute in humanitarian activities. In a condition where parents imply that money is the only compensation for any accomplishment, they would like to gain money from any little work that they carry out for their fellow citizens in a social community. For instance, when I participated in a fundraising event last year, I met an old coworker who now became a famous enthrapruner. He wrote a big check for the event but he also demanded the cermony holders to endorse him in the way of competing for congress.
In conclusion, some parents prefer to give their kids money for their good grades at school. However, it can lead to a number of complications in children’s future. It may rise their expectations from others and create some misunderstandings. Also, this action can reduce their social and charitable contribution which they can make for their society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...s one the most common ways that parents use to show their satisfaction toward their...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'adapts'.
Suggestion: adapts
... action is completely acceptable and he adapt himself with this information and perce...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1765.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90277777778 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78747058889 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552777777778 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3768579441 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.823529412 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1764705882 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345198663864 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11824804536 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793891593612 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227194457993 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0778730317343 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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