Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to illustrate your response.
Raising and nurturing teenage children and preparing them for future adult life is so much crucial for any parents, Because that is the time when they should gradually reduce their protectiveness toward their teenagers and let them to get more familiar with outside environment. Some parents prefer to find a part-time job for their childs to work. However, there are some others who disagree with this decision. In my view, I believe that it is better for teenagers to experience a part-time job during their early teens and I have two reasons to support my belief.
First, a part-time job can assist the youngsters to have a clear understanding of society and how the money is actually earned by their parents. When they find a part-time work for themselves, they have to attend there regularly and wake up in specefic times that may be they always sleep before. So, their life started to enter into a shape like many adults around them. Normally, They would be unsatisfied with their current position but it will change as they fit into the job and learn something new which they have not experienced before. For example, My friend Jim was from a wealthy family where he could spend a large amount of money in ant thing he wanted. However, this situation changed when his parents decided to put him in a part-time job and cut his mounthly stipend. At first, he just nagged about his poor condition and low amount of income which is an assault to him. On the other hand, when he started to accept his position and learned one or two skills about the job, he suddenly began saving his money. When i asked him that what happened that made to save money, he replied that I understand the difficulty of earning money, the money which i spend effortlessly.
Second, They can have a better view about their interests and what they are stronger in. it can help them to find a suitable job in the future for themselves. For instance, I used to work in a clinic as an assistant where I help the doctors to manage their patiants records. I learned so many good things about medicine and bio science which made it clear for me that I should pursue my gradate studying in bio related areas. This simple part-time job changed my future and brought me into a whole different new world where I am totally satisfied with what I am doing and researching. So, a low part-time job has the ability to shape your future by your own hands.
In conclusion, it is important for young people to have at least one part-time job during their young ages, as it is so beneficial for them in the future. It can help them to learn a skill and also assist them in a better understand ing of their interests. So, parents should not ignore this in their children's nurturing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2266.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60569105691 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47205947784 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489837398374 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8305596294 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3636363636 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31818181818 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287557103249 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958927164631 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632205184506 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21172355946 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691377855247 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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