Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Following heroes and role models is an important aspect of human's life. People spend much of their time watching them and they try to imagine themselves in their place. Some people think celebrities and famous entertainers and athletes have more influence on younger people than older generation. However, some others believe that they are equally important for everyone in the society. Personally, I think that young persons like me may consider celebrities more important for two main reasons.
First, youngsters would probably recognize these predominant persons better that old people. Most of the celebrities and famous actors and athletes are from young to middle age generation who may not be this much popular a couple of years ago. Even a large number of them may have not been born yet at older people youth time. For example, I love Selena Gomez and her songs, because I can easily connect with her tracks when I am listening to them. My dad always complains about it and tells me, what is that annoying sound you are listening to? When I mention that it is Selena Gomez, he just asks me who is she? Is she famous? Although most of the people in planet know who Selena is, most of older people do not recognize her.
Second, young people know famous entertainers and athletes better since they are more close to their lifestyle. Every era and period of history presented its own special lifestyle which followed by most of that period's people that become less popular for future generations occasionally. For instance, my friend, Jim, like to tattoo his arms like Armstrong and he found it so interesting, while his parents refuse to accept this fact. They believed that this would not be acceptable according to community norms. On the other hand, Jim reminds them that this is turning into a popular style in this generation’s life and every one respect it.
In conclusion, famous people have fundamental influence to the society where they are living in it. People indicate that these persons have more effect on younger adults due to various reasons. Young folks know them so much better than older adults and they also feel them close to their lifestyle. So, we should be aware about who we are choosing as our kids role model.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 250, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...uch popular a couple of years ago. Even a large number of them may have not been born yet at olde...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89583333333 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4923004263 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557291666667 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0095152823 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4545454545 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4545454545 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206138050068 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629690101446 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617863290197 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130850597818 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049286013199 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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