Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?

In this sophisticated world that we live in, smartphones play an important role in human beings' lives. There is a controversial argument among people who believe that this is a profitable implement for their children or not. In my opinion, this kind of cell phones is important to have because of two reasons elaborated in the following.
First and foremost, people are needed to be in touch with each other. What gives these phones to children is ease of making a connection, leading them to find new contacts. These mobile phones make it easy for everyone to make a connection. More usage of telephones, more connection people have. For example, there are some applications in new cell phones which let you find new friends in your vicinity. Finding new friends, children experience new things such as how to make new friendships. They find it nice to earn these experience before they enter their society.
The second reason is that by having these kinds of phones, children encounter a new world full of various things. It is generally thought that children can learn from the internet more and more because it is easy to reach and they can use it wherever they are. Although there are some bad or not commensurate information for children on the internet, it is their parents' obligation that control them. For instance, there are many websites procuring knowledge which are related to a specific age. Having reached that age, children can have accession to these websites and learn them.
Having summarized all the points on the accession of children to new generation of cell phones, I can draw a firm conclusion that these implements play an inevitable role in the advancement of children's humanity. There is a strong suggestion that cell phone makers product some cell phones which can be controlled readily by parents for children.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, for example, for instance, kind of, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95483870968 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71224149039 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529032258065 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3008383519 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3529411765 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2352941176 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76470588235 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261483008355 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.085664948619 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063193649785 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162083131853 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450984140466 0.0645574589148 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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