Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones and it is understandable why they do so. But, I am of the opinion that young children should have access to the smart phones. After all, it is they who need them most as they are in their early learning stages. Though some disadvantages are there by allowing the young children to use smart phones, I would like to explain why I believe they should be permitted to use them.
First and foremost, it is through the access through the internet the children these days learn most of the things. For example, a child might not know what he or she is interested in doing. But after having access to internet through smart phones they have wide scope to explore new things and get to know about their likes and dislikes which might help them to be more successful in future as they get to decide what they want to pursue at a such young age. However, one can tell that they can have access to internet through computers and things like that. The children these days are not interested in turning on a computer, installing browsers and then opening websites. The introduction of mobile applications has garnered the interest of not only adults but also children as well. It makes everything simplified and helps the user achieve what they want to do without much knowledge and abstracts the complexities involved in them. Let us take the example of Youtube Kids application in mobile phones. It has a wide variety of contents which are tailor-made for young children that provides both entertainments as well as educational content. If a child is asked to open the same application in a computer in front of a large screen, he or she might not be interested in doing so. But at the same time, if it is available to them in a small handheld device they would be more welcome in using that.
Moreover, it is also an important way to communicate with them. The features such as location tracking and usage monitoring allow the parents to monitor their children's behaviour. I also strongly feel that it is the duty of the parents to educate their young wards of the perils of using such devices. They must be taught from the young age about how to protect themselves from stalkers, hackers and other dangerous people who are out there trying to hurt the users of the internet. BY introducing these things at a young age helps the parents to mould their children and also teach them how to treat others who are communicating with them over the internet and how to behave with them.
In the Digital Age, it is paramount that everyone knows how to use the internet to their benefits and expand their knowledge. Therefore it is the duty of grown-ups to educate the young and upcoming generations on how to use them, their advantage and disadvantages as well as how to protect themselves and how not to harm others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1119, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
...ldren that provides both entertainments as well as educational content. If a child is aske...
Line 15, column 127, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
...ir benefits and expand their knowledge. Therefore it is the duty of grown-ups to educate ...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, after all, for example, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2370.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66535433071 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56536094676 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450787401575 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.9 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8116001996 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.727272727 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0909090909 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04545454545 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258900913921 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802881555564 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911200470998 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161865026741 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102508306384 0.0645574589148 159% => OK
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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