Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Today, technology has transformed our style of life. Two of the most used technology are cell phones and the internet. Over 80% of the people in the world have access to these technologies (mobile and the internet), and children are one of the community slices who use the internet and mobiles significantly. However, I believe parents should forbid children from using and owing to these types of technology. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, using the internet without monitoring or controlling from parents would expose the children to inappropriate content. Internet is a vast world with different content. Some of the internet content is inappropriate, and this might destroy the child's personality. Furthermore, many people believe that the internet is the main reason behind changing children's behavior nowadays. For instance, My nephew, 7 years olds, uses his mobile to play fighting games. Eventually, his behavior has changed noticeably. The way he reacts and responds to his environment has changed and became cruel. This example is the best explanation of how using these technologies might affect children's behavior and personalities.
Furthermore, due to the availability of the internet and smart technologies, children have easier access to knowledge and information. Because of that, children become lazy and lack creativity. The Internet has enormous information and knowledge, but having more information does not mean being smarter. Nowadays, children have become more dependent on the internet, and that makes them slow and mindless.
Moreover, Nowadays, children are addicted to their smart devices than playing outside or socializing. Their social skills might affect negatively. Many children do not leave their rooms for days, and some of them can not even talk to the stranger. Mobile and the internet make them shy and anti-social. For example, my nephew does not leave his room, and he barely talks with people, and the main reason for this is his addiction to mobile games.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the disadvantages of owning and using mobile and the internet outweigh its advantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...is a vast world with different content. Some of the internet content is inappropriate, and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1854.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35838150289 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90618685143 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531791907514 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8007508555 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.6086956522 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0434782609 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.69565217391 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203147544825 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595100227735 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438647597301 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113426595896 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302274256664 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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