Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Nowadays, smart telephones provide people with a strange of tools to keep in touch with others around the world. However, I firmly believe that is wrong to think that our young children can use their mobile phones all the time for two reasons. First, children must play with cars, dolls or read a book while they are increasing their imagination. Second, young children must meet new people in a park or at the school instead of by mobile phone.
First and foremost, is statistically shown that children which playing with any toy such as dolls, cars, legos or read a book can increase their intelligence and imagination. For instance, essential universities proven in different studies that children at the age of 4 to 10 years which parents gave them a new book or toys instead of a mobile phone, they were more intelligent than children who passed their time in front of a phone. In this way, is hugely beneficial to children play and discover new things in order to increase their knowledge.
Another important point to consider is that children must meet other children at school or park in order to share different moments, interchange ideas or create unreal histories while they are playing. For example, is scientifically proven that young children need to pass their time meeting new children in order to shape their personality and behavior. In this sense, parents must encourage their children to go out and meet new people instead of they are at home playing with their smartphones.
In sum, there are grounds to believe that is extremely hazardous to young children use a mobile phone instead of they can use their time playing with others at the park or in the school. Finally, I am of the conviction that young children must use their time in useful activities in order to increase their intelligence.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, second, so, while, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1515.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87138263666 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61537960961 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469453376206 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 450.0 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.8490882013 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.25 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9166666667 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219982571507 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102735010809 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435221998838 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158849438503 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486365978446 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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