Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?

Should the young children forbid from owing smartphones or keeping in touch? People express disparate opinion on this. From my perspective, I disagree that young children should touch the smartphones in as much as the following reasons.

First, the children’s time can be wasted that they are quite concentrated in the internet access phones. Playing videos games and watching unnecessary videos are the ubiquitous conundrums of every children even in highly educated family, when we provide the smartphones. For example, my friend’s father always allow him to use the internet on his cell phones. Most of the time, my friend played the videos games, as well as, watch the sex- videos. As a result, he cannot study properly even father always encourage to study.

Next, not only waste the time of the children, the children can be lazy and the health can be exacerbated. For instance, let us take my own personal example, when my father permitted me to use the smartphones, I addicted on the Facebook. I spent to watch the Facebook at least five hours in a day and did not contemplate about the exercise. At last, I suffered from the myriad disease. Additionally, today, I used the heart rate and sugar controlling medicine.
Further, the children cannot adjust in the social when people do not restrict to use the smartphones. A Child greatly uses the smartphones and he does not provide the enough time to his kith and kin, which surely affects the socialization. For instance, my brother has been using the smartphone from childhood, he always watches he songs and movies whenever we have the festival or important meeting. Also, he does not play the outdoor games because that he plays the videos games. Hence, he does not have any close friend and he cannot speak frankly in a myriad of people.

In conclusion, children should not allow to use the smartphones in as much as they waste the time, harmful for their health and face myriad of conundrum to adjust to the society

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'studying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: studying
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Message: Did you mean 'using'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: using
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, frankly, hence, so, well, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92603550296 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73457458901 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526627218935 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5259365975 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6315789474 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7894736842 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169334613351 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057663156695 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728965991407 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108295895786 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693683457389 0.0645574589148 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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