: Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Development of technology has led to an increase in the quality and amount of interaction between children and their parents. While there are multiple disadvantages to offer money as a prize to children for their accomplishments, I personally believe that in most circumstances, it would help children to push forward. This essay will explore some of the reasons for my perspective in the following paragraphs.
First of all, admiring children in different ways including offering money to them is a great way to make them be motivated and step towards their goals, which in turn would help them to be successful. I think a personal example can shed some light on this statement. A couple of years ago, when I was an elementary student, my parents used to give me money for my great scores in various courses. This approach encouraged me a lot to study more and keep succeeding at different levels. This way, I was also willing to study for the courses that I was not interested in and make progress in the optional activities and programs offered by the school. Thus, being appreciated by money helped me a lot during my initial years of studies and made me a very hardworking student.
Secondly, using the money to encourage the students to do better at school would be very useful for them because money is valuable, and they would be able to do and buy whatever they want. In fact, having money in hand, children have a wider chance to choose what they want to have. They can go to the stores and buy their favorite toy or video game. Indeed, being able to choose whatever they want is more appreciated than being offered a specific kind of present, which they might not be interested in. Accordingly, many children would prefer to have a robot with high technology or a great bicycle than hundreds of storybooks. Therefore, it would be more likely for children to put a lot of effort into their studies to get good grades in order to earn money for buying their favorite things.
On the whole, taking all the aforementioned reasons into account, I believe that the children should be paid as a prize for their good grades. Not only will they be motivated and encouraged to try harder but also they will be able to buy their favorite things, which would be more valuable for them to try for.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, i think, in fact, kind of, first of all, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66748768473 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66552197539 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495073891626 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5209123114 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.470588235 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8823529412 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281476681162 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0947096166558 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500365337972 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172914091406 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388812707112 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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