Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high-grade mark they get in school. Do you think is a good idea?
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that nowadays, parents play a key in children’s life. In this regard, parents always try to help them in different ways to be successful especially during their academic lives. some parents offer their children gifts such as money or gift cards for each high-grade mark they get in school; however, others hold opposite viewpoints that in this way children would not be independent especially when they become adults. Although some parents tend to believe in the latter one, I believe in the former, and I think offering children gifts or money has a lot of advantages for them. Accordingly, in what follows, I will try to provide some cogent reasons to support my statement.
First and foremost, it is necessary for children to be motivated during their academic life to be more successful. It goes without saying that studying hard and getting a high-grade mark is difficult and longsome. Therefore, obtaining prizes special monetary rewards have great impact on children’s efforts. By way of illustration, when I was a child, I usually studied two or three hours a day, for I felt bored and exhausted. As a result, most of my marks were awful; therefore, my low-grade marks lead my parents giving me a reward to persuade me to study more and be a successful student. After a while, I studied six hours a day and did all my assignments eagerly and I became the first ranked student in my classroom. Had my parents not given any offers as gifts to me, I would have gotten low-marked in my assignments and courses.
The other important equally reason is that parents teach their children some pivotal skills for their life such as how to manage their budget. It is crystal clear that some skills should be learned from an early age because of taking a time that some skills needed. Furthermore, all children looking for a great opportunity to buy their favorite items by selves. In this way, they need this skill to save their money in order to have those items. As a case in point, my brother had a dream to buy a play station, but it cost a lot. He concluded that the more courses will get high-grade marks, the more money as a reward he could have. After a while, he became the best student in his school and the latest version of the play station was bought by his saving rewards. For this reason, offering children a monetary reward would be like to kill two birds with one stone.
To wrap it up, though some may oppose this idea when parents propose to their children some money or gift cards would be helpful for them. Not only will children be more motivated to get a high score in their course, but also they learn how to manage their budget indirectly. All in all, it is suggested that parents decide to put this plan in their routines to have more motivated children studying more eagerly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...especially during their academic lives. some parents offer their children gifts such...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, while, i think, such as, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2368.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 506.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67984189723 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57105206221 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48814229249 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0854995966 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.956521739 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78260869565 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367813533491 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102226109027 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867257176429 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244203457974 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0803760978294 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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