Yes, I completely agree that it is a great idea to provide incentives to school-age children for their good performance in school. In fact, the real world works this way. Whenever somebody does a good job, he is rewarded at work in form of promotion or a raise. So, setting this habit in early childhood shapes the mind of child to do better in future and upcoming exams.
First of all, when children get rewards for their awesome grades, then they will feel encouraged and appreciated. This will establish a pattern in the mind of children that if they do good work in other fields and education, then they will be rewarded. Hence, the children will automatically start doing better in every aspect of life. This will bring more success in their life in coming years, maybe in college or during their jobs. My personal experience is an compelling example of this. I still remember when i was in grade one, I was the first student in my class and my dad bought me a bicycle that day. That was the happiest moment of my life and after that gift,I have always performed very well in my subjects. That gift which my father gave me 25 years ago still encourages me to be productive and work hard in my office.
Furthermore,the students can use reward money to buy games or other materials that they need which will make them happier and cheerful all the time. Children can buy popular games and play with their friends or they can even give a treat to their best friends. For instance, lets say a boy got 4th position in his class and his father gave him $50. With this $50 he can buy "Fortnite"(a popular online game) and then enjoy playing this game with his friends.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that school-age children should be rewarded for their good performance. This will encourage the children, boost their confidence and provide them money to use on their own.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, still, then, well, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1552.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6328358209 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61259693239 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55223880597 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.7385357436 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.2222222222 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6111111111 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05555555556 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250920967669 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083173136657 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752472363951 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173314165879 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694754569895 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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