Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their
families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support
your opinion.
I believe that its best if young adults become independent from their parents as soon as possible. I believe that everyone should be responsible for themselves and try to find their own path independently instead of depending on their parents for their survival.
First of all, when young adults become seperate from their parents they learn the true meaning of life. When living with parents everything is taken care for us from our basic needs to our profligate demands. This shields the children from the challenges and hardship of life. Eventually, one day the children will have to leave their parent's home and pursue their dreams. Then why not go on this path sooner and face the difficulties. My personal experience is an compelling example of this. While I was in high school, I was spoiled by my parents and I used to make a lot of demands to my parents. I used to make them buy different video games and ask them to take me to shopping frequently. But when I left for my college, I understood the true struggle of life as I was responsible for myself. I learnt everything from cooking for myself to successfully managing and spending my earnings.
The next reason is that, being independent means freedom to the children. Now, they can pursue whatever career they always wanted or live their life how they had always wanted. We see many young adults complaining that their parents are not allowing them to work on something that they think is good for them. The young adults will immediately gain full control of their lives after being independent from their parents. My brother always wanted to be a writer but my parents wanted him to study engineering. He had frequently made it clear to my parents that he wanted to be a writer but they were still insisting that he should study engineering because it had a stable future. So my brother decided to move out when he was 18 years old and work on his career as a writer. After moving out, he joined a literature class in another University and is pursuing his dream.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is always a good decision if someone wants to live independently from their parents. This is because mainly it provides the young adults freedom and teaches them the struggles of life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...difficulties. My personal experience is an compelling example of this. While I was...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adults'' or 'adult's'?
Suggestion: adults'; adult's
...is because mainly it provides the young adults freedom and teaches them the struggles ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, still, then, while, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69674185464 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61026335639 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503759398496 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.210876836 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.1818181818 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1363636364 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04545454545 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305043944595 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0957321509536 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905868696549 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217916144976 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557417191904 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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