Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do think this is a good idea?
There is no doubt that nowadays, high grades and marks play the crucial role in the education of children. No one can deny the influence of high scores on the daily lives of children. A controversial question which often raised regarding this issue is parents can offer to their children for each high grade. Some people may hold this view that it is better to give money to each top grades, I firmly subscribe to the idea. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that parents offer money, which very dispensable and harmful for children. The reasons I think so are manifold, which will be discussed widely hereunder.
One of the reasons coming to mind is that parents by doing work can encourage and convenience their children to high effort and the best attempt for attaining which was praised by parents. An empirical study in the Asia shows that the majority of parents in eastern countries are doing the same work for children who have a better grade than other children. In order, them not only can be prosperous, but can be high social rank in the future as well, and in doing so, parents pave the way for children to flourish.
Another equally important reason is that help to children have economic attitude arose from the mind of children; however, how this process can do? When children usually receive money, they can manage for their daily expense, or deposit it in the account of the bank, then give their money which obtains in the long run and an excellent source to help parents can compensate for bad circumstance of family economy, rescuing their family in a predicament. Hence, eventually, children reach the zenith of parent wish which is high morality with generosity and the best director in the subsequent stage of their life.
The last but not least reason, parents act accordingly teaches them every con need effort and endeavor, whether they like or not, and realize their parents how to earn money hardly or “money does not come from sky incidentally.” Therefore, children were prepared for the near future with this orientation as be diligent and hard-working.
To wrap it up, it is my profound belief that “parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade” help them to be a hard effort, morality, generosity, and comprehend everything does not get without difficulty. By doing so, parents get a lot of profit and benefit at the cost of slight money.
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accordingly, but, hence, however, if, incidentally, may, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, i think, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88461538462 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.641165181 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533653846154 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.2811893168 48.9658058833 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.466666667 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7333333333 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.460385373073 0.236089414692 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152118150009 0.076458572812 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666628902415 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252826923651 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0759977659369 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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