Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
In our modern era the approaches that society behave toward the younger generation has been substantially modified. It is stablished beyond doubt that modification has been immensely worthwhile in various facets of the communication among children and parents. But still there are some gaps between ideal behavior and what some of us are conducting now. A controversial question is that the way we react upon children good outcomes. and exclusively todays question is that whether we need to offer them money for their each good grade or not? Personally, I raise the hand as the opposition for this sort of encouragements since I believe the money has not equal worth as they effort has.
The first exquisite point that I want to mention is that the school-children are still vulnerable against the world which has been empowered by money, so they may find the money as a tool to appraise their accomplishment. Therefore, they will be misguided by people who misuse their ability, knowledge, and efforts by offering them simply money without precise appreciation for what they are. The whole point is not defining our children's hard work for just a few bucks, their identity is beyond that money and our haphazard encouragements would make them feel that they can get evaluated by money.
Second, there are plenty of creative ways than merely offering money to appreciate their good grades. A prime example is the recent research in psychology department of Harvard University which has released some informative suggestions for parents who are doubtful how to impress their beloved ones after their prosperity in school. They recommend parents to engage their children with a social event or make them pleased by a recreational reward. They claim that it will develop their social intelligence as the result. Hence, the act of doing something together as a family will engender remarkable memory and happiness for our adolescents. These activities can be like going to super bowl game to applause the team that he/she likes more or buying a movie ticket for the next weekend after he/she got that grade.
To make a long story short, I firmly believe that rewarding our school-children with money is not a great idea. Since, they would be misunderstood how their efforts are worthy and it will make them fragile in their future life. Besides, there are many other prizes which can get altered against money for enriching our offspring’s social intelligence. What may come as a surprise is that with some modest means we can show our gratefulness toward their work and it definitely has outstanding consequences which prime our children for their future fulfillment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, while, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2243.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10933940774 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86657222405 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542141230068 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 689.4 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9325560773 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.052631579 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1052631579 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26315789474 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357921924547 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105668668059 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569323950518 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222859280192 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214191293115 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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