Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
It goes without saying that from ancient times to this contemporary modern time, education has played a prominent role in each society. Having a solid educational background could assist everyone in having a successful life. In this regard, parents have been striving to improve their children’s knowledge. The controversial question which arises here is whether parents should suggest money to children if they get high grade in school or not. Taking the recent studies into account, it seems as if parents had better give their school-age children money as a present for their tremendous effort of getting high score in that children learn how to set plan for themselves and save money.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that children learn to set goal in their lives and struggle to achieve them. To put it in other words, without having explicit purpose in life, life seems meaningless and futile. If we are taught to set aims in our lives even from early ages, it can keep us effective in our personal and professional pursuits. Accordingly, by giving something such as money for obtaining high grades, children would definitely learn that the more they try, the more money they will gain, which in turn, teaches children if they have certain goal in their life and put the top gear into it, they will acquire precious outcomes. An example can drive this notion home. Once, I read an article in one website about a plan in one of the schools in Canada for making their students more successful in their future vocation. It was mentioned that to achieve this purpose, the administrator of the school asked students’ parents to offer students money if they gain high score. To make long story short, after several years, all students in that school became one of the most influential individuals in their country and all of them asserted that without this wise plan established by school in which we learned to set goals in our lives and struggle for obtaining them, we could not have developed this skill in our lives.
The second noteworthy point is that students learn to be careful with their money. To be more specific, when people try extremely hard to gain money, they are more likely not to spend their money in careless way, which leads to saving a huge amount of their money. As children have made a lot of effort to acquire high grades and consequently, money, they would become similar those people who carefully consider their expenses and think that money does not grow on trees. To put it in the more vivid picture, when I was a school-age child, my parents gave me money each year for my attempt in getting high GPA. Since this money was my accomplishment as a result of my endeavor in school for gaining high score, I saved it in my bank account and did not spend it on futile things like my peers. Now, I use this money to pay my university tuition fee. So, my parent policy about offering money for high grades helps me to be much more conservative in my spending.
In conclusion, having aforementioned reasons and examples into account, one can infer that parents must suggest their children money if they get high grades. Because this policy not only teaches children about setting goals in their lives and strive to achieve them, but also makes children more conservative in their spending.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...en more conservative in their spending.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, if, second, so, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2761.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 578.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.776816609 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90322654589 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5131239199 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484429065744 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 841.5 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.1725577985 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.5 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2727272727 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09090909091 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404704367949 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127946949101 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867920030092 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277316413812 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057361464125 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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