Some people believe that employment over the age of 60 is not right and creates lots of problems. So people should retire after 60 and not work.
agree/disagree
The majority of the people are waiting to be out of the labor market and devote their time to their family. This trends prompts a controversial topic whether people should be retired after the age of 60 or not. I adamantly believe that citizens of a country should work in their 60s.
first and foremost, experience and knowledge have been accumulated during years and if governments push people toward early retirement, the society and economics would worse off. Since retirement means that people can not gain from a retired's precious knowledge and experience, early retirement means losing the advantage of using all the information they have. Take a professor of a university as an example. He allocates a sheer scale of his life to study in his major. Now the university excludes him from his faculty members. There are two detrimental consequences. In one hand, the university should hire someone with insufficient information and spend lots of money and energy to train him. On the other hand, the university will hinder students to use the knowledge of the retired professor.
More importantly, the early retirement provokes numerous mental diagnosis in elderly. Retired people do not have any goal in their life and if they merely stay at home, eventually seeds of depression will be spread in their life. According to a large-scale research done by world health organization (WHO) there is a meaningful correlation between retirement and depression. Data of these two factors show that the earlier elderly become retirement, the more possible that we have depression in the elderly people of the society.
last but not least, early retirement lead insurance companies toward bankruptcy. The revenue of this important sector of the economy is the years the people are going to pay for their insurance. On the other hand, the cost of them is pensions they pay to retired. Accordingly, in the case of early retirement, they can not balance their budget and the likelihood of failure is a lot. As a matter of fact, most of the countries are suffering from this problem. The interference of the governments has helped insurance companies but it puts the states under pressure of debt. Debt of the USA, as an example, is 10 percent of their gross domestic products (GDP) and most of them is associated with early retirement imposed to the insurance private sectors.
In a nutshell, I subscribe to the belief that people should not retire at the age of sixty.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, if, so, as a matter of fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2061.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00242718447 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80615591662 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533980582524 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3936334748 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6086956522 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9130434783 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08695652174 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206087060395 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0550517564777 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694743535896 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140376720807 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780270844504 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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