Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
All of the human's daily routines consist of two parts. One is about the place and the job they do for the living, another one is their leisure time. Nowadays most of the people believe that these two facets of their life are spent on compulsory tasks. I utterly agree with this idea that most of our times are spent in doing things that we should do. I feel this way because of two main reasons which I am going to describe as follow.
Firstly, Because of growing competition in the labor market, it is hard to earn money. As a result of this competition, people need to upgrade their knowledge regularly. In the other word, after their work and when they come home still, it is crucial for them to have research and study more for their job. It means that they don’t have enough free time for their hobbies. Besides, most of the jobs are in the enclosed environment which is named office. Approximately, people spend 8 hours a day on the chair and exclusively, they stare at the monitor. Accordingly, this kind of employment is not favorite of the wide range people. They do because they should do. As a personal experience, I have worked as a designer for a magazine since 3 years ago. Every day I wake up at a fixed time and deal with Photoshop for 9 hours a day. Even when I come home, I will search on the Pinterest for the latest trends of designing. As an employee, I am not a fan of my job but, I need to do it for the salary.
Secondly, most of our free times are passed by the task that we should do. People are suffering from two issues. First, their motionless jobs cause obesity. Second, they don't have enough time to cook for themselves therefore, they prefer to eat processed food. These ways of living damage their health significantly. As a matter of the fact, to compensate their harmful activities, they spend most of their free time in the gym. Although few people enjoy running 30 minutes daily, these kinds of mandatory jobs have nothing to do with personal enjoyment for most of us.
In conclusion, I believe that millions and even billions of people pass their time by the activities that don’t amuse them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48849104859 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47924911475 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521739130435 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.2471356293 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 70.2 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.64 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120535305962 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0370669045421 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036939525763 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0761714439861 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300217215524 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 11.7677419355 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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