The celebrities, who are the salt of the earth, have wide spread influence to the society through network or social media.Their actions and telling are the tools that affects people. But the effects are different between younger people and the elder. From my point, I agree with the statement that it is more important for the youngster to learn from the opinion of celebrities. The following paragraphs will aptly elucidate my standpoint with conspicuous reasons.
To begin with, celebrities, with high exposure, are expert in some fields. Thus, learning from the the knowledgable people is crucial to us youngster. Compare to with the elder, the young have stronger ability of learning, that is means they can spend less time to imitate the celebrities and remember it for long time. For example, in the society whose information are mainly being committed by internet, most of the younger people can handle the electronic devices smoothly. However, the elder need to be familiar with the devices like computer, cellphone. Thus, with less energy, the young can acquire their information.
Next, having live for more time is advantage of old people, because they have more experience about our world. So they are inclined to trust their own ideas which they may learn from the failure in the past on some public issues. For instance, when a public topic occurs which is occurred in the past, the opinions about this may be divided by the supporter's age. The elder are more likely to follow their experience about the past, whether it is right or wrong, because their experience are more accessible. Thus, the opinions of celebrities have less influence to the old people. In other word, their opinions are less important to the old people.
Last but not the least, having curiosity of the new things is the natural behave embedded in young people mind. Thereby, they are more likely to accept the newest ideas. With the rise of age, people have less interests to try understand the new things or ideas because the new items is the two side sword, and they want to avoid the the negative impacts by rejecting it. If the opinions or ideas of celebrities are refused by the old one, it might not make any influence to them. In briefly, those opinions have more popularity in young people.
As the aforementioned reasons and examples, it is crystal clear that the opinions from people with high exposure are more acceptable by young people in the circumstance where the elder are more willing trust their own experience and decision. Therefore, thoughts of celebrities are more import to younger people than they are to older people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in brief, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2199.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9527027027 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5441669138 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475225225225 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 687.6 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5815822337 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6086956522 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3043478261 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47826086957 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264719171096 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841957173326 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631314191296 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165858252656 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616208806788 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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