To achieve high efficiency or benefit, companies or other organizes, in modern society, require the young strictly follow and obey the things, such as working method or extra work. From my point of view, i agree with the statement, young people are trapped by strict rules which expect them to follow and obey. The following paragraphs will aptly elucidate my standpoint with conspicuous reasons.
To begin with, China are in a high-speed development which is attributed to companies’ improvement. Companies, in China, believes that it is extremely important to require their new employee to work more time for companies' profit because the newcomer who have little working experience are usually afraid of losing their valuable job. Thus, they are inclined to follow the leader's unreasonable order of extra work. However, most of the companies don't pay money for these extra work by reason that the young have to learn more knowledge in the time. As a result, more and more young workers sacrifice their health to make profit for their employer without paying. In brief, it is too strict for them to finish their work in such condition.
Next, the tradition regulation also asks the young to obey and follow, such as the opinion of sexual bias. With no shadow of doubts, sexual bias is existed in everywhere, in China, women are thought to be the person who have to just take care of the family instead of achieving their own goal. For example, the elder in China always say that a young girl need not work so hard, she just has to marry a suitable husband. However, if they have less requirements like this, the young female might not regret for not to capturing their goal in the future. In basic, the tradition opinion plays an important role in the rule that limit the young people.
Last but not the least, interacting with people by internet is more frequent than before, that is to say, the young people are easily be affected by the main stream through powerful internet. For instance, person who start to build his or her own business may be treat as madness because, the opinion of mainstream is getting into a big company to have a stable life. Therefore, in addition to the rules of traditional opinion and company, the young still have to resist the pressure of mainstream.
As a result of aforementioned reasons and examples, it is crystal clear that there are plethora of rules come from company, traditional thinking and opinion of mainstream. These strict opinions require the young to follow and obey, which may finally wear out the creativity and vigor of young people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...d or extra work. From my point of view, i agree with the statement, young people ...
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Line 3, column 22, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (China) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...icuous reasons. To begin with, China are in a high speed development which is at...
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Line 3, column 77, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'company'.
Suggestion: company
...peed development which is attributed to companies progress. Companies, in China, believes...
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Line 3, column 443, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ra work. However, most of the companies dont pay money for these extra work by reaso...
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Line 5, column 148, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...ith no shadow of doubts, sexual bias is exist in everywhere, in China, women are thou...
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Line 5, column 374, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... that a young girl need not work so hard , she just has to marry a suitable husban...
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Line 5, column 441, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun requirements is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...suitable husband. However, if they have less requirements like this, the young femal...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in brief, such as, as a result, to begin with, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2154.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8404494382 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48539339287 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52808988764 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0226378599 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.368421053 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4210526316 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.15789473684 5.45110844103 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21186326272 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077017438787 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0801724733734 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140349617625 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891594314286 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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