Some people take the view that older children can take care of younger children, some others may hold the view that taking care of children should be done by other adults.
Considering the competitive world that we are currently living, parents are obliged to have full-time jobs in order to provide basic necessities of life. Accordingly, they are in a dilemma whether they should put the task of taking care of young children on the shoulder of the older ones or not. I adamantly believe that taking care of the children should not be done by the older children.
First and foremost, children are not mature enough to take care of other members of the family especially younger children. They do not have well-rounded information to protect the children. As matter of fact, they have limited knowledge regarding what is appropriate and what is harmful to the children. Considering two children who are alone at home as an example. The older one turns the television on to amuse himself and his brother but since he cannot evaluate whether a specific show is appropriate or not, he decides to watch a show which is full of violence and inappropriate languages. Consequently, this decision could have various pernicious severe impacts on the behavior of them.
More importantly, there are various internal and external factors which can easily distract children. Admittedly, children readily forget about their responsibility because of availability of various distraction. According to a report in the Hamshari newspaper which I have recently read. A mother of the family left home for ten minutes in order to go shopping and said to Ahmad, her ten years old child, to take care of his five years old brother. While Ahmad was watching his favorite cartoon on the television, his brother woke up and when wanted to come down the stair he felt and unfortunately it made irreversible damage to his brain. The child could not walk or talk in his life anymore. This example illustrates that children are lack of the protecting capability.
In a nutshell, I truly believe that children should not shoulder the responsibility of protecting the younger children. It could have various detrimental consequences because they are not developed mentally and physically and the likelihood of neglecting their responsibility is a lot.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...have full-time jobs in order to provide basic necessities of life. Accordingly, they are in a dil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, first, if, regarding, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1802.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11931818182 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96797102655 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1465727096 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.111111111 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61111111111 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308222704214 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107740680128 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139380591954 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200311933703 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0878927402456 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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