Which one do you think is the most important for high school teacher (age from 15 to 18)?
1. the ability to give students advice to plan for their future
2. the ability to find which students need help and provide them with help
3. the ability to encourage students to learn on themselves outside of the classroom
Teachers play a vital role in the society and more importantly students who are the precious assets of our nation are led by their advices. In my opinion teachers should have the ability to give the students advice to plan for their future. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the fillowing essay.
First and foremost, teachers deal with many students in their career. Therefore, they know pros and cons of a path that a particular student willing to choose. To put it in another way, because of the communication with many people they have many stories to tell. And if a student choose a wrong way, their advice and suggestions would be beneficial. For example, when I was student, I love mathemathics and wanted to choose this field to study in the universities. Accordingly, I told my math teacher to give his feedback. He said that it is not a proper idea, because most of the graduated students in mathemathics are struggling to find an acceptable job. I changed my mind and studied computer science in the university. My girlfriend has studied mathemathics. Although she is realy talented and has a wonderful knowledge, she cannot find a good job to make money. As a result , by listening to the advise of my teacher, I changed my career.
Secondly, teachers can pave the students' way to the prosperity, because they know about a student's talent. Teen people are like unripe frout. Schools and particularly teachers can help them in the process of maturity. Teachers should indentify talents of their students and show them if they want to have a bright future, they should consider that in their planning. For instance, my girlfriend as I mentioned above, studied maths and she had worked as a teacher in a private school for a while. One of her students had a considerable difficulty in solving math problems. My girlfriend said to me after talking with his parent, I recognized that they put their daughter under pressure to get math course rather than taking music one. She have played the piano since she was 8 years old. My fiancé convinced them she should droped math class. As a result, the student currently is playing in one of the best bands in my country.
In a nutshell, I believe that teachers should have the ability to advise the students about their future's goal.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73762376238 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69981003808 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514851485149 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0563155842 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.56 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.16 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281862329737 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794213805789 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712051417772 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19999587204 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569097741579 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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