Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern agriculture does damage the environment, but providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment. @aalaeeTOEFLiBT
Agriculture plays an indispensable role in feeding earth population. With the growth of human population and scarcy of resources, some people believe that not matter how much we damage environment, we should try our best to provide more food for public. However, I subscribe to the view that we cannot turn a blind eye on environment since it could harmfully affect various facets of human's life.
First and foremost, damaging environment by activities like deforestation would impose detrimental effect on human's health. Admittedly, we have been faced with various earth destructions in the human history. Nowadays, many environment specialists warn governments about their policies and mention consequence of their successors policies with impose irreversible impacts on the earth including, climate change and air pollution. These two factors have provoked numerous illnesses and diseases on the human's body. According to the large-scale survey done by World Health Organization number of people in the world suffering from lung cancer increases 30 percent compare to the 30 years ago. The researchers claim that most explanation of this issue is increasing the amount of Carbon Dioxide in the environment and that is because of various factors like deforestation.
More importantly, inclining toward modern agriculture by processes which are harmful for earth impose severe effects on the economy. Without any doubt, if we try to damage the environment in order to provide more food for humans, governments should allocate a sheer scale of budget to make the earth a better place for humans to live. As an economic point of view, economic development obtaining by damaging the environment is not sustainable. Many economists have mentioned that consequences of these approach and warn the world's states to avoid these actives.
In a nutshell, I disagree with idea that governments should not interfere in the agriculture sector by introducing various law to protect the environment because if they neglect their role, our next generation will pay the price of our negative policies. I think we reach to a stage of humans history that not only people should not ruin the environment, but also they should put as much as effort possible to leave a better earth for their children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1926.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32044198895 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94506751488 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566298342541 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2177915112 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.4 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1333333333 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168145649588 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524692914007 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546101099099 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110058933931 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442162604044 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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