Some people believe that it is better to come with new solutions in the high school or not. Which one do you prefer?
By and large, the contemporary age is no strange to the notion of timing and its importance in the modern era. Without paying enough attention to scheduling, it depends on chance or exceptional talents of students that they make remarkable improvements in the lifespan. In this regard, different possibilities have been proposed for exploiting the time as good as possible. Notwithstanding differences, in my view, gaining a practical job is a cracking choice for the students, who are going to have a stunning style of living at the moment as well as in the future. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, by contributing to a part-time job besides the school, the students can achieve some precious experiences, thereby increasing the possibility of their survival and success in the future. As a matter of fact, nowadays, the companies and the job markets are looking for the individuals who possess some experiences as to their field of studies. In fact, because the companies’ owners tend to spend money as less as possible, they do not want to hire someone without practical experiences, who their training take plenty of cost and energy. For instance, last summer one of my professors proposed me to work in a computer company for a while. Because I am majoring in the hardware computer engineering for nearly three year, it had different advantages for me, including working with the instruments which could help me to achieve a practical experience, getting familiar with the competitive environments of the job market, and making different friends in that place, who can be useful for my future.
Secondly, the by working beside the school, the students can make money, and it is a good practice for training the independence. As time goes by, the family’s expenses have increased, and the parents have to spend their income on varied affairs, namely the tuition fee, the energy costs, new electrical facilities, to name but a few. In this condition, the students should have a supplementary source for their expenses. In addition, the students are inclined to spend more and more money on amusements, such as playing video games, going to pools, and so on. An observation I have made recently is a good example of this. One of my neighbors, named Ali Mokhtari, who is a talented student, attended the university last month. In actuality, his father is older than he can pay Ali’s university tuition fee. After gaining a job in a local company, he could gain a considerable amount of money that was enough to pay the necessary tuition.
To sum up, as mentioned above, not only do gaining a job in the school days help the students accumulate precious experiences but also it can be a stunning source of money for their living expenses. In spite of that, other options offer some good beneficial results. To choose one over the others would be a personal preference based on the one’s needs, ambitions, and desires.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 431, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...pos; owners tend to spend money as less as possible, they do not want to hire some...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, while, as to, for instance, i feel, in addition, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, as well as, by and large, in my view, in spite of, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2512.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 506.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96442687747 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95560743403 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525691699605 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 792.9 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.2932056522 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.619047619 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0952380952 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5238095238 5.45110844103 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0925263693321 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0273193461856 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0300340554733 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0622018127839 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419464035502 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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