Some people believe that parents should pay their children a small amount of money to do jobs around the home (such as washing the dishes or taking out the garbage), while other people believe that parents should not pay their children to do these tasks. Which view do you agree with, and why?
As an inseparable part of culture-oriented civilizations, family is inextricably intertwined with the individual's lives, since people's fate is susceptible to the influence of the lessons they gain in this setting. However, the question of whether parents should pay their children money to do household chores or not, has aroused as the subject of controversy among the psychologists. When it comes to my position, I personally subscribe to the view that parents should pay money in exchange for their children's cooperation in jobs around the home. I have some reasons, two of which will be aptly explicated hereunder.
The first reason worth discussing here is that paying money to children is a core motive for them to eagerly take part in house affairs which positively prepare them to land a decent job in the future. As a matter of fact, participating in teamwork not only help children to be aware of their parents’ efforts for them, but also teach them how to divide different responsibilities in different situations. To be more specific, they should have a commitment to do the assigned duties under any circumstances, it stands to reason that they learn how to multi-task under lots of pressure and how to improvise practical solutions to deal with challenges they will confront in real-life situations. As a case in point, I vividly remember, when I had two exams last semester, as well as I should wash the dishes and cook in the day before the exam. I appropriately manage all the affairs by time scheduling and tracking the plan meticulously. To clarify, I studied the quiz materials one week before the exam and the day before the exam having finished all the jobs related to me at home, I reviewed the lessons. Had I not be motivated by the money, I would not have done the tasks. Hence, my personal experience competently corroborates the fact that paying money in exchange for the children's engaging in household tasks is significantly improved their sense of responsibility, which is the most crucial pillar to be successful in the job market, albeit difficult at times.
By the same token, another equally paramount point to be mentioned is that children active participation in home-related affairs provides an opportune time for them to improve some exclusive skills, which prepare them for their independent life. Indeed, gaining money in exchange for performing some tasks teach an important lesson to the children that is the high value of earning money. Before that time, children play just as a consumer role, and even though they do not have a critical necessity to buy, they might shop too much. In contrary, after the applying task divisions and paying money, children learn how to manage their monetary affairs, as well as exercise their decision-making skill. Furthermore, they perceive that they should rely on their own budget rather than their parents, therefore they get a broad grasp on their expenditure management which is an essential prerequisite for getting ready in the independent life. From the psychological perspective, I recently read a scientific article about the development of human brain; according to this research, the rate of success among people who experience financial independent in the lower ages is significantly higher than those who do not experience this. Consequently, these worthwhile statistics throw some light on the point that getting involved in household chores and accumulating money increase children capability to tackle independent life challenges.
By and large, according to the above-mentioned reasons, I strongly agree with this standpoint that the more children engage in home-related jobs, the more prosperously they live in the near future. I strongly recommended that government allocate extra budget for families whose children take part in household chores.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...ons they gain in this setting. However, the question of whether parents should pay their children money...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, as a matter of fact, as well as, by and large, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3235.0 1977.66487455 164% => OK
No of words: 620.0 407.700716846 152% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21774193548 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98996985923 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07198199231 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 320.0 212.727598566 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516129032258 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 1015.2 618.680645161 164% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.3440299873 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.047619048 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5238095238 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47619047619 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302146943416 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0904134722033 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0751515556804 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196265559513 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0909281710873 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 11.7677419355 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 163.0 86.8835125448 188% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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