Independent Writing Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing sports can teach people lessons about life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As an inseparable part of glorious societies, playing sports is inextricably intertwined with the people's lives. Regarding this issue, the question of whether individuals can learn important life lessons through playing sports or not, has aroused as the subject of controversy. As far as I am concerned, I personally believe that playing sports is the most significant pillar of success in life. I have some reasons, two of which will be aptly explicated hereunder.
The first reason worth discussing here is that playing sports is the best policy for everyone who wants to be well-prepared for tackling life challenges in near future. Indeed, in spite of the popular belief that success and failure are two sides of a coin, people by engaging in the sports programs learn this brilliant lesson that failures play a crucial role in paving the way of prosperity for people in their lives. As we have seen, lots of successful persons assert that they gain their worthwhile experiences within their infinite endeavors to deal with their challenges. Besides, taking part in sports strengths individual's decision-making capability, and helps him to take the responsibility for his decision’s outcome as well. Furthermore, every individual learns how to set specified goals in life, and apply all their abilities to fulfill them. Actually, they vehemently determine to win, so in this way, they utilize their power to reach the zenith of prosperity no matter how hard it is. As a case in point, I vividly remember, when I was new in high school, I really suffered from the educational recession, and my grades really threw me into a major depression. The counselor of my school put forward me to participate in different sports programs. Being in sports groups provided me an insight into this reality that we should never not give up our incessant strive in hard situations. Therefore, I made slight alterations to my narrow mind which makes it easy for me to think differently. Had I not involved in playing sports I would not have learned such a valuable fact. Hence my personal experience competently corroborates the fact that playing sports positively affect people's future lives, albeit difficult at times.
By the same token, another equally salient point to be mentioned is that engaging in sports activities enhance people's exclusive skills to be an outstanding person in the job market. As a matter of fact, playing sports provides a suitable situation for people to practice how to manage their behaviors with various persons of different ages and social classes. To demonstrate, there are lots of similar cases which a person has a row with the coach or other team members for the sake of gaining his legal right to preserve his spot on the team. In addition, performing same tasks with different individuals makes it easy for anyone to start a conversation with others. To be more specific, engaging in different sports programs is the best opportunity for people to be in close contact with individuals who have mutual interests as them, so they can get acquainted with different people, and make lots of new relationships. In this regard, they can have a chance to develop their interpersonal skills which is the most noticeable key factor in landing a decent job. Moreover, involving in sports activities improves your mental ability to coordinate your physical activity with your brain process which highly boosts your mind power. From the psychological perspective, I recently read a scientific article about the development of human brain, according to the research, the rate of success among people who participate in some sports activities is significantly higher than those who do not play any sports. Hence, these noteworthy statistics shed some light on the point that getting involved in some sports activities increase your relevant abilities to have an appropriate job in future.
By and large, according to the above-mentioned reasons, I strongly agree with this standpoint that the more people engage in sports programs, the more prosperously they live. I strongly recommended that more people add sports in their daily routine.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... not have learned such a valuable fact. Hence my personal experience competently corr...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...nt abilities to have an appropriate job in future. By and large, according to the above-...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, first, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, really, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, as a matter of fact, by and large, in spite of, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 97.0 52.1666666667 186% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3484.0 1977.66487455 176% => OK
No of words: 677.0 407.700716846 166% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14623338257 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.10090420048 4.48103885553 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91844450788 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 359.0 212.727598566 169% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530280649926 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 1070.1 618.680645161 173% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.9635551215 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.037037037 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0740740741 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85185185185 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204988755101 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598497780515 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430322193796 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141755584094 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329789526307 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 178.0 86.8835125448 205% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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