Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the busy and crowded world today, we should not expect people to be polite to each other.
As an inseparable part of each culture-oriented civilizations, mutual respect is inextricably intertwined with people's lives. Since all aspects of life are susceptible to the influence of social behaviors, individuals must care about this crucial facet of their lives. While in this day and age some people subscribe to the view that life challenges pave the way for citizens to treat in an impolite manner, others look at this concept through a different lens. Be that as it may, many remain neutral and adamantly claim that a myriad of elements should be taken into consideration to prove which belief is closer to reality. To my way of thinking, the more people have an acceptable approach, the more prosperously they live. So I can say that this statement is the one I can be in agreement with. The following paragraphs will aptly substantiate my conspicuous viewpoints.
This argument is supported by the persuasively stated evidence not just opinion that people opt for having an acceptable manner in dealing with people in society in order to have a successful life. As a matter of fact, the human being has an intrinsic propensity to be respected, which requires two-sided appreciation, indeed, having an impolite behavior is not beneficial to either party. Besides, gaining other's honor leads us to be more confident which positively affect our productivity, and subsequently allows us to tackle the real-life problems much easier. As a case in point, I vividly remember, when I worked in a computer programming office, and I had a hard time dealing with some financial problems, which adversely affected my behavior at work. For this reason, subconsciously I behaved in an impolite manner with my co-worker. Similarly, they had an inappropriate manner with me that really suffered me. After all, I changed my mind, and I experienced my enjoyable work atmosphere by my favorable behavior, which substantially affected my co-worker’s manner. Therefore, my personal experience competently corroborates the fact that having acceptable manners helps you to have a better feeling about yourself.
By the same token, one should regard another subtle point meticulously that in addition to enjoying other's respectful behaviors, people can nurture more polite children provided that they curb their aggressive manners in diverse situations. The sentiment expressed in this sentence embodies the view that what adults do implicitly affect their children behaviors, owing to the fact that they are the most important models in children's lives and play a critical factor in shaping their personality. From the psychological perspective, I recently read a scientific research about the influence of parent’s behaviors on their children, according to the study, the rate of polite children who have parents with respectful manner is significantly higher than those who have disrespectful personality. Hence, these worthwhile statistics throw some light on the point that foster politeness in children is the crowning achievement of having an appropriate manner in life.
By and large, according to the above-mentioned reasons, I vehemently agree with this standpoint that people prefer behaving in a polite manner in different life-situations on the grounds that not only can they have more successful life, but also they can be an appropriate model in their children lives. Now the inevitable question is why some people resist behaving in a polite manner yet.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, if, look, may, really, similarly, so, therefore, while, after all, in addition, as a matter of fact, by and large, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2927.0 1977.66487455 148% => OK
No of words: 546.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36080586081 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83390555256 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15054996161 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 296.0 212.727598566 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542124542125 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 925.2 618.680645161 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.8815408267 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.380952381 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153890804704 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0505858352214 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0323722039957 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103870297847 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286065070878 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 166.0 86.8835125448 191% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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