Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, most of the adult people are exceedingly busy, so it is essential to spend time with their kids properly. Personally, I believe that busy parents should spend time with their children to have fun. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, during the weekdays, young people go to school and do their duties and home works, so the weekends, when whether the parents or the children are free, are the best times that they can have fun with each other. Furthermore, if parents do various things such as playing games, doing sports, and kidding with their kids, they will boost the quality of their relationships with their children. In other words, it is vital that a nice and friendly atmosphere be provided in which youngsters can develop their sociable characteristics. Therefore, sociable young people can make enormous progress at tremendous speed in society. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. During my childhood, my father was playing and having fun with me in leisure times. Therefore, we always had good relations with each other, so I have learned lots of things from my father and used my father’s experiences in my social interactions. Now, after ten years, I have an amazing relationship with my boss, which helps me to develop continuously in the company.
Second, pedagogically, youngsters need to have fun in their free time to advance in their studying, which directly affects their future. It is vital that young people at the weekends separate from their books and do something fun in order to improve their proficiency in their studying. Hence, parents can help their kids in this regard by doing various things with their children, such as climbing a mountain, swimming in a river, and playing a computer game. However, in the period of final exams, it is necessary to study and be hard-work even at the weekends.
In conclusion, I opine that busy fathers and mothers should have fun with their kids in their leisure time. This is because this strategy will improve the sociable characteristics of young people and will boost their proficiency in their studying.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, i feel, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1878.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98143236074 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75301665018 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511936339523 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4255919262 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.470588235 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1764705882 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23529411765 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407500413933 0.236089414692 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132366782305 0.076458572812 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120331752439 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249023060221 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487435502609 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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