Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
One of the most important side effects of the modern life, especially in the countries with more capitalistic life styles, is that people do not have enough time to spend together and this is because individuals are overwhelmed with daily life's tons of tasks. Parents also are not excluded from this phenomenon. Nowadays, there is a plethora of debates among the youth education's experts on how should parents spend their time with their children. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely preferred to play games and having fun with kids rather than doing the tasks related to their school works. It is my firm belief that games would improve their creativity, besides, parents not only should support their children's education, but also they have to take care of other aspects of their life.
To begin with, playing with children will boost their creativity. Boardgames for instance, can help children to develop a wide variety of strategies such as economical strategies and basics of civilization development. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. My parents used to buy me different boardgames with a differential in categories. From strategy boardgames to the ones that needed problem solving attitudes. As a result, the way that they used to spent time with me helped me a lot in learning how to think rather than just supporting me in my school related problems.
Furthermore, there is no doubt that parents should be supportive of their children in all aspects of their life and that should not be summarize only in their education. Nowadays, children are already confronting to much educational pressures in their school and if parents too want to talk to them about the school works, it will be really frustrating for the kids. Drawing from my own experience as an elementary school teacher, the students whom had more flexible parents were in much better mental condition. Their parents supported them as their kids, not just someone who should be good at school and get top marks. It is certainly clear to see why parents must manage how to spend time with their children.
To sum, in light of the reasons mentioned, although there are always some exceptions which are excluded form general rule, I strongly believe that spending time for entertainment and playing suitable games could be more worthy for both parents and their children since it will improve their creativity and also make them feel supported in any condition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 496, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'prefer'
...re forced to choose, I would definitely preferred to play games and having fun with kids ...
Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: TO_TOO
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
...adays, children are already confronting to much educational pressures in their sch...
Line 5, column 275, Rule ID: TOO_TO
Message: Did you mean 'to want'?
Suggestion: to want
...ressures in their school and if parents too want to talk to them about the school works,...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, really, so, for instance, no doubt, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2107.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00475059382 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67106335958 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532066508314 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.651710058 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.941176471 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7647058824 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314361972469 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100806792051 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680978602764 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189401366978 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0707868928188 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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