Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
In a modern competitive era, many children all over the world grow up having working parents, who do not have much time to spend it with their kids. This fact is bringing an argument, if parents should relax and have fun with the kids or should they practice and do some schoolwork together. Each of the sides of the debate has its own pros and cons. However, I believe that it is more beneficial for the child’s both mental and physical health, if his/her parents would relax and spend joyful time with their kids. I think this way because of the several points which I would try to explore in the following essay.
First of all, when parents spend time non-related to the school they can do some outdoor activities, such as sport or any other physical exercise. Because of the common education system is lacking the physical education of the child and more focusing on the academic knowledge of the pupil, it is essential for the parent to develop child’s physical health and spending cheerful time with the kid while playing the football or other sport can not only improve their immune system and health in general but also develop good attitude to the sports which would reflect in their future. For instance, studies has shown that parents who dally outdoor time with their kids are more likely to detect some physical issues and as a result they can fix a certain problem before it would get serious.
Also when the parent hang out with the child, he/she can notice misbehavior pf their child and teach them how to handle exact situation. Because of the absence of the experience, children usually does not know how to act in the unusual situation. It is the job of the parent to show how to fix the problem or deal with the emotions so their children would grow up morally developed and emotionally stable. Playing games is a great way to practice. For example usually when children play video games they can not control themselves and they end up screaming or crying. It is a perfect example of how parent can show how the child can act himself/herself in the particular episode.
In a nutshell, there is authentic evidence which can lead us to this conclusion that family should spend time with each other in spite of all busy schedule, especially playing games or sport as a mobile way of entertaining.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...problem before it would get serious. Also when the parent hang out with the child...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, while, for example, for instance, i think, in general, such as, as a result, first of all, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69926650367 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42024892696 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486552567237 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.0510465345 48.9658058833 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.133333333 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2666666667 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 5.45110844103 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305603256698 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101802849664 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775223643351 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189023790176 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062693294536 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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