Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to sch | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?

Nowadays parents are busier than the past generation, in most families both of the parents work for long hours a day. So, one crisis that they should face with is manage their free time to spend with their kids efficiently. They should choose between helping them doing their homework or have fun with them. Personally, I believe spending this time on games and have fun moments is the best way. There is a lot of reasons, which two of them, which have great importance, are elaborated hereundre.
To begin with, spending time with kids and play with them make them happier. As a result, it will help them to do their homework and school responsible better because, they are in good mood and also want to proud their parents. So, they will try harder to be success in school. There a research that reveals, happier students have better grades in general. The students that their parents are very worried about their grades and want them to spend their whole time on schoolwork’s in future separate of the school and don't like to resume their education.
Moreover, this manner makes great memories for them and help the children feel close to their parents and have strong relationship in future with them. It is necessary for children to have good relation with their parents to have an easier teenager time. Kids that play with their parents have healthier adulthood in future. For instance, one of my friend’s childhood was fulfill of time that do homework and never went out with her parent for playing, now she is cold with her parents, she started smoking in her fifteen and have very bad memories from childhood.
To sum up, in my opinion, in this busy world, the best way to spend time with children is manage the time to have fun. This way will help them to be happier and eager to their homework and, have excellent memories from childhood and have great relationship with parents in future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 164, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'managed'.
Suggestion: managed
...ne crisis that they should face with is manage their free time to spend with their kid...
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Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to do' or 'do'.
Suggestion: to do; do
...They should choose between helping them doing their homework or have fun with them. P...
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Line 2, column 284, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...y harder to be success in school. There a research that reveals, happier students have bet...
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Line 2, column 518, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...’s in future separate of the school and dont like to resume their education. Moreov...
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Line 3, column 314, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... their parents have healthier adulthood in future. For instance, one of my friend’s child...
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Line 3, column 372, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'fulfilled'.
Suggestion: fulfilled
...tance, one of my friend’s childhood was fulfill of time that do homework and never went...
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Line 4, column 91, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'managed'.
Suggestion: managed
...best way to spend time with children is manage the time to have fun. This way will hel...
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Line 4, column 270, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...nd have great relationship with parents in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, for instance, in general, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71856287425 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32459532207 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479041916168 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 461.7 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4429911615 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368175115196 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14778476121 0.076458572812 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101979124805 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260302039643 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520513037763 0.0645574589148 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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