Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to sc

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, due to the fast pace of technology and science growth, it is essential for parents to engage in the process of their youngsters' education to make sure that they are not misusing the available technologies. However, since parents have a crucial role in developing the mindset of their kids, we cannot underestimate the importance of the non-educational engagement of family members with their children. So, I personally believe that in case of having a limited time to interact with kids, parents should try their best to make good memories and have fun rather than concentrating on school subjects. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, family members are the very first human beings that infants and newborns meet during their life and hence, they are the ones with the foremost impact on every single action of the child. To be more specific, young people look at their parents and other family members to learn what to do in different situations and try to imitate their actions to overcome obstacles, manage their life, and care about their health. So, if parents spend their free time with their children more on playing and doing sports or even social activities, they can teach them lessons more valuable than school subjects.
As for the second reason, plays have an unavoidable impact on developing children's skills. Actually, researchers have shown that play is not only for having fun and increasing the levels of pleasure. However, it can be performed to practice skills that cannot be experienced during life as a kid. For instance, children need to know how it feels to be destructive. However, if they try to respond to this special feeling by breaking glasses and other things at home, their parents will get mad at them and this will result in aggressive reactions that have bad mental effects on children. Nevertheless, parents can help their child to explore this feeling by playing with them and for example, helping them build a house using legos and then letting them demolish the house. This way, not only the youngsters better explore their feelings and desires, but also spend a happy time with their parents and create some good memories which result in a closer and stronger relationship.
In a nutshell, I believe that parents who don't have the chance to spend a great deal of time with their children have to spend their time in playing and doing side activities rather than working on school subjects because this way they can help their children to be in better physical and also mental shape, and additionally, they can provide their children the opportunity to better explore their feelings and interests.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, nevertheless, second, so, then, as for, even so, for example, for instance, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2251.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9911308204 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60469398491 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49889135255 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.6336901511 48.9658058833 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.066666667 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0666666667 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 5.45110844103 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344679572095 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112090149888 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873271516435 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224580622239 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366894758122 0.0645574589148 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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