Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Unlike parents in the past, today parents have to work more, so they do not have enough time to spend with their children. Some parents believe that they should spend their free time having fun with their children, but others believe that it is better to use that time doing schoolwork. Personally, I prefer to spend my free time having fun, like playing games or sports. I feel this way because of two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, parents can help to improve their children's knowledge by doing a game. Parents can combine the game or sport with a lesson in which their children may be weak in it, so children can learn and practice their lessons by doing something interesting. Also, children never get tired of learning by this method, and it can pave the way for memorizing their lessons in their long-term memory. For example, in my own experience of my school time, I always had a problem with mathematics, and I could not remember some formulas. Since I hated mathematics, so I did not try solving my problems. Finally, my mother found my mathematics problem, according to my grades, so she decided to use these formulas as steps of a game that we played a lot. Subsequently, I could learn and memorize those formulas after a while.
Secondly, playing games or sport can have beneficial influences on children's personality. It is worth knowing this fact that doing games or sports is a kind of practice which can make us ready for real life. Add to this, many psychologists believe that children's personalities can be formed in games; for instance, they can learn honesty, cooperation, and even accepting losing. Besides, parents should notice the fact that children need to learn these concepts as they need to learn their lessons in school. Significantly, parents are the best teachers for their children who can play a crucial role in forming their personalities and forming their personalities in a good way can help them in their success in their personal life.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that parents have to use their free time having fun and playing games or sports. This is because they can help to improve their lessons by playing games which are not boring for them, and playing games or sport has an important role in forming and improving their personality.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1890.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70149253731 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51693602546 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432835820896 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 402.0 20.1344086022 1997% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1890.0 100.406767564 1882% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 402.0 20.6045352989 1951% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 145.0 5.45110844103 2660% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388836950208 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.388836950208 0.076458572812 509% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.295240630185 0.150856017488 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145589500006 0.0645574589148 226% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 201.7 11.7677419355 1714% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -319.63 58.1214874552 -550% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 157.7 10.1575268817 1553% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.46 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 25.97 8.01818996416 324% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 52.0 10.002688172 520% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 162.8 10.0537634409 1619% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 158.0 10.247311828 1542% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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