Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to sch

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In today’s world, with the increasing importance of childrens’ upbringing, and also rising work hours of parents, ways parents behave with their children are of vital importance. A controversial uestion that is often raised regarding this issue is what the best works are that parents should do with their children during their spare time. Some people possess the conviction that it is better that parents have dun playing games with their children, while others belive that parents ought to consider the schoolworks of children. I personally contend that children should carry out their assignments in school and parents should flourish their children in other aspects. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursary glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that from psychological pont of view, children should flourish in different aspects. In other word, they should learn various skills. For instance, parents have to teach them how to behave with others, how to communicate with others, and so on. Provided that they only pay heed to the progress of their children, when the children become a mature person, he or she would be a lonely and isulated individual sho cannot participate to different social works.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that playing games and sport with children not only is beneficial to them from spiritual aspect, but also it can be advantages for their education. In fact, playing games with children could help to rise their imagination and creativity. In this field they can learn and experience situations which are not possible when they are carrying out their school duties.In fact, although playing games with children seems useless work, it can have unbelievable indirect effects on dipperent facets of their character and personality. In order to make this point more clear, consider my personal experience. When I was in primary school, I had a close friend. His parents was absolutly tight with respect to his education in school. Alwasys they put pressure on him to study lessons and they examined him everyday. After two years, not only he felt depressed and discard the school. Thus, I came to the result that behavior of his parents was errouneous.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that paying attention to other aspects of children upringing instead of focusing on their education at school, would have numerous advantagous.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, second, so, thus, while, for instance, in brief, in fact, with respect to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2162.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23486682809 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72723721311 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542372881356 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.2561976466 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.789473684 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7368421053 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57894736842 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254474001108 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0750388331022 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07089462111 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149242916471 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0771792023801 0.0645574589148 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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