Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
When it comes to the issue that the parents should spend their free time helping their children in their schoolwork, some people may agree with this idea and give us sound reasons for their beliefs. On the other hand, some other people might disagree and have different opinion. Also, those opponents could provide us with strong purposes to support their thoughts. I believe that the parents must help their children with their schoolwork because there are so many reasons. This short essay will demonstrate some point regarding my point of view in the following paragraph:
First of all, in my opinion, it is widely understood that the rapid development in technology today provides different sources that the student must gather information from it. So, the parent should help their children by teaching them how to follow the technology in the way that increase their knowledge. However, the children whom do not know how to use the technology in productive way, they will lose the chance to improve themselves.
Another point why I advocate that the parents must have great role in their children’ schoolwork is the development in the schools’ materials. Today the student learn different subjects in their school. So, the parent should learn their children how to manage their time and resources in order to increase their knowledge. Additionally, the parents will have great impact on their children schools’ life, if they help them according to their experience how to improve themselves. On the other hand, the parents whom spend their free time playing with their children, they will give their children just short termed benefits.
Finally, it is a well-established fact the children will feel more comfortable in their schools, when their parents help them. If the parents spend their free time helping their children in their duties, the child will understand how the schoolwork is important. Eventually, the child will work hard in his school to make his parents proud of him. However, the child whom his parent neglects his homework importance, he will be less caring about his school.
From what has been discussed above, we may draw a conclusion which says that, people who hold opposite idea may have the right to believe in that, but my opinion, and other people opinions are overwhelmingly too much to be ignored.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 439, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to accord' or 'accord'.
Suggestion: to accord; accord
...n schools' life, if they help them according to their experience how to improve them...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, regarding, so, well, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14285714286 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64025686561 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480519480519 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5525999304 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.470588235 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6470588235 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58823529412 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280768108957 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106470833003 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681599359458 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155819651472 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687494364572 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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