Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I think, This is a very controversial question, because each alternative ways has theis spacial advantages. But in my opinion, if this time of parents is used for having fan playing games or sports, it is better for both of them, means both of the parents and childeren. I propose my idea by two reason.
The first point I would like to make is the effect of going out and have a fan span with childeren. When the busy parents go with their children out , the parents will feel some spacial situation of freeness, awarness and owness. But on the other hand and more important part of the topic, the children by this method will be prepair for a fresh day in the tomarrow schools and they will have an access to the social behavior by being with their parents in the social place.This ability will help them to be an active member of their future groups, Because this behavior is going at the precociousness of their life and ,if they be made in this way ,they at no way will not have any aggravative reaction in the future in some different situation , from education life to job market and their personal life.
The second point I would like to make is that this way of thinking will make the children more confident and independence. Since in the todlerhood, the children need the supportive actions from their parents ,by this policy they will have this support and it will have remarkable effects on their mental building in the future. And also, by this supportive behavior the children will be learnt that they do not have any need for the dailies problem from anyone ,even their parent albeit they always will know that their parent are in their life as a last resort but they will never look at them as a solver of their cheap problems and they learn that solve their confusions by themselves.
Finally, I thinl if the parent want their childeren be as a adept peorson in his or her field of study or job in the future and if they want the open mind children who can analysis the situation and give some suolution for them , it is better that they do not spend their littel times for solving their children prblems and say to them that they have not any more time for fan or playing in a freindly and family atmosfer.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, second, so, i think, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49385749386 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34156630871 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454545454545 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.1344086022 199% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 164.676774319 48.9658058833 336% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 182.9 100.406767564 182% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.7 20.6045352989 198% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222318134483 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0970770265571 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742409354804 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152006928786 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272249300049 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 11.7677419355 171% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.8 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 10.1575268817 162% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.65 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.0537634409 179% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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