Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is very important for growing children to plan their time properly, so that they'll make the best use of it and in the meanwhile will be able to enjoy their childhood. People have different opinions when it comes to planing their offspings time when they are not around to oversee them. some believe its' best for children to spend their lesuire time just having fun or sports, others think it is better for them to participate in study groups alongside their peers. In my view, the second one is the better choice for two reasons, which I will demonstrate in the following essay.
To begin with, children will still have the chance of not growing up alone, by being with others, while their parents are not around. As you know it is very bad for youngsters to feel lonly, and it will have a very direct affact on their future personality. considering this, it is a very good decision to arrange for children to spend their time with their counterparts, so that despite their parents busy schedule they won't isolated. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in primary school my father was a very busy architect, and my mother was a teacher who spent most of her day at school. I was always lonely, and this loneliness had resulted in me being very shy, but thanks to my mother's good planing this issue was fixed. She decided to enroll me in an extra circular activity to our school, which allowed students to stay in after school time and do their homework in an study group. I remember several students from different classes attended this activity and soon enough I found lots of friends and forgot about being shy. By my mother's thoughtful decision I my problem was solved.
On top of that doing schoolwork will other children will help students to learn teamwork, which is very much required in every career path these days. As we all have heard several times, from different media, people need to have teamworking abilities to succeed in todays' business world. Helping children to learn and get used to working with others in a team will grantee their future success. To illustrate this point I refer you to an article that I read the past week in an education magezine. In this paper an experiment was discussed, which showed that people who start group work earlier learn how to deal with others very much better than the ones who are used to working alone. I this experiment had took place on around 100 hundred people, in the coarse of 10 years, which was from when they were 13 to 23. Half of the study group were engaged in group works from the start of the study, and the other half just go involved in group work when they starter working at the age of 18. The results surprisingly demonstrated that there is a huge gap in team working abilities of youngesters’ who are used to working with others.
To conclude all this, provided arguments clearly present that it is better for children that have parents with heavy schedules to work with other children on their schoolwork. This is because they will not become isolated when they grow-up and also they will learn teamwork at a very young age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, still, while, you know, in my view, to begin with, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2586.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 560.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61785714286 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40118752508 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4875 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 779.4 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9912222317 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.434782609 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.347826087 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277891297592 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0822036690058 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836916655885 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181356389603 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891414326232 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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