Some people feel that high school students benefit from participating in organized sports, while others feel that sports is a waste of time. Instead, students should focus on studying. Which point of view do you agree with and explain why.
In this competitive era, better education is considered to be a necessary means to success. Therefore, students are asked to focus on studying and obtaining excellent grades. However, studying is certainly not the only thing students should have to concentrate on. On the contrary, engaging in activities outside of study, such as sports, should be an essential activity for students as well.
Without a doubt, being healthy is the most direct benefit from sports. Nowadays in this developed world, food is delicious but usually lacking in nutrition. This means that people can easily become obese or unhealthy if they are not too careful with what they eat. Aside from controlling one’s diet, exercise plays an indispensable role in this issue. It is undeniable that regular exercise keeps people in good shapes; therefore, it is extremely important to cultivate the habit of doing exercise from childhood.
At the same time, joining a sports club also provides students with plenty of chances to acquire social skills that cannot be taught in the classroom. We can discover how to get along well with others in a sports team; moreover, teamwork is a crucial ability we need to study in order to play well. It is indisputable that there is a wide variety of lessons students can learn when participating in organized sports.
To summarize, we find that playing sports can affect students profoundly, both physically and mentally. Starting the practice of regular exercise from school age is a proven way to keep healthy, which is in one of the most precious treasures for human beings. In addition, joining organized sports facilitates students to learn more greater social ability early on, which would not only enable them to enjoy a more colourful student life but also support them to be exceedingly confident and comfortable when they finally step into the real world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 329, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'greater' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: greater
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, in addition, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 308.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12987012987 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70629688694 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61038961039 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0915433529 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.333333333 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5333333333 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73333333333 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248462046904 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0748648930346 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434806190011 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141472321531 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397099982003 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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