Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this wonderful and colorful world, everything has a role to play in everyone’s life. The question is how essential it is. It could be as crucial as something we cannot live without it; however, it also could be as tiny as dust that we would never notice. Without a doubt, celebrities such as popular athletes and entertainers are important to people, especially to younger people.
It is hard to overstate that the importance of outside factors such as celebrities which affect teenagers’ growing. There are too many things to be explored and to be learned for younger people, because they obviously go through less things that the elder and there is a tremendous space to grow. The celebrities then play a pivotal role in this issue. Younger people tend to follow the celebrities since there certainly are something worth learning from them.
In addition, younger people and most of the celebrities are at the same era, indicating that they not only can see those celebrities as model, but they also can consider celebrities to be friends. It goes without saying that people at similar age can share more common things than people with large gap of age. For example, my Mom never cares about what my favorite singer says in public, while my friends and I usually try our best to realize what our idols are talking about. In fact, what my idols say is easier to pose a resonance on me because the similar era.
To summarize, there is a wide variety people that weigh at different level to everyone, and celebrities are an indispensable part for younger people. This is because, younger people are in the stage of growing; in addition, the same age of those celebrities could arise a greater impact on younger people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 230, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun things is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ople, because they obviously go through less things that the elder and there is a tr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, while, for example, in addition, in fact, such as, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1437.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 298.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82214765101 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64190306739 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543624161074 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1045256598 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.642857143 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214693111191 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740676512032 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678082584443 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127803652601 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026955504808 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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