You have been given a gift of money. Which would you rather spend it on: a) a piece of jewelry b) a pair of concert tickets c) an expensive meal.
If I was given a gift of money and had to spend it, instead of satisfying myself physically and buying jewelry or having an expensive meal. I would rather spend it on buying a pair of concert tickets. There are two reasons why I would choose this option and this essay will explore why.
To begin with, music is certainly one of the most crucial hobbies for me, as it can make me relax and enable me to escape from reality temporarily. It does without saying that attending a concert can provide much more pleasure than other activities, because it allows me to experience the amazing atmosphere in live music shows. There are two ways I usually enjoy music, which are playing music with my friends in a band and listening to music by wearing headphones. However, I did not realize that immersing myself into a professional music concert can bring me a tremendously superior music experience until my first time going to a concert.
In addition, I would love to share the delight of obtaining this given money with my friend. Therefore, buying a pair of concert tickets and attending it with my friend is the obvious option for me. In fact, I have a friend who I met in the guitar I participated in during university, and we surprisingly share the same taste in music. During that time, we often went to concerts together; moreover, attending a concert together can truly bring me more pleasure than attending it alone, as we can share how we feel and discuss what we think. In other words, buying a pair of concert tickets can give me access to enjoying music with my friend and simultaneously enable me to taste the happiness of sharing.
To summarize, because music is what I love and sharing this given money is also what I prefer, buying a pair of concert tickets is indeed the way I would choose to spend this money.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, in addition, in fact, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1505.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 327.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60244648318 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58810286241 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507645259939 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.5044019908 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.769230769 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1538461538 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209148988646 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967146280372 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0986518657288 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170259029056 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112324083118 0.0645574589148 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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