Whether young or not, everyone need a dream to chase after. Dreams, just like stars shining in the sky, are symbols motivate us to progress. As for me personally, I prefer to dream practically and make efforts to achieve those realistic goals.
I have to admit that some people would call me coward since they believe every great person should think bigger and make ambitious dreams for their life. In this way, they can pursue greater achievements and finally become the outstanding one in our human history. I also heard a lot such encouraging stories. For example, Jianlin Wang, one of the wealthiest merchants in China, said his first goal is to earn 1 million dollar, which sounded quite crazy and unbelievable. With this ambition and courage, he eventually earn hundreds of billions dollar. As a result, those who are meant to be legendary great men tend to have courage to set unrealistic goals and keep chasing after them.
Reasonable as the above statement seems, in my opinion, it completely neglect the influence of fortune, one of the most import factor for people to succeed. Truth can be frustrating, but we cannot deny that successes of every famous achiever in our history are more or less caused by luck. Just like gambling, you are bold and ambitious, but your ending can be a huge success or a tragedy regardless of how hard you are working on it. Therefore, I firmly believe that it is more practical and safer to set realistic goals and work on them.
My experience is an appealing example of this. When I was 9 years old, my dream was to visit the Mars as an astronaut. Since then, I worked hard on my science class and exercised regularly. However, it turned out that my physical condition could never fulfill the requirements because of the accident at my birth. For this reason, instead of dreaming something unrealistic and chasing after the unachievable goal, I began to dream more practically like being a scientific researcher.
Moreover, I also think ambitious dreams can easily let people stuck into desperate once they find they cannot achieve them. To be more specific, as I said before, every success requires luck, so it is not uncommon to find out that, after a long time of pursuing a goal, every effort has become meaningless simply resulting from lack of fortune or an opportunity.
So In conclusion, based on the above reasons, I am of the position that it is far more meaningful to set realistic goals instead of pushing ourselves too hard.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 519, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'earns'.
Suggestion: earns
...his ambition and courage, he eventually earn hundreds of billions dollar. As a resul...
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Line 5, column 71, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'neglects'?
Suggestion: neglects
...ent seems, in my opinion, it completely neglect the influence of fortune, one of the mo...
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Line 5, column 343, Rule ID: YOUR[1]
Message: Did you mean 'you're' or 'you are'?
Suggestion: you're; you are
...mbling, you are bold and ambitious, but your ending can be a huge success or a trage...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, as for, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82051282051 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66596768188 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589743589744 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0354235206 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4761904762 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202338840041 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0495927420146 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482765501729 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0967806456036 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0180762344152 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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