It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves.
most people may feel confused when asked how they define themselves. since as complicated human beings, it is hard to accurately define people just like defining animals or objects. therefore, generally we tend to use evaluation gained from social groups where we belong as labels to define ourselves. While these tags from the outside can partially build up our perception of ourselves, however, as far as I am concerned, this should not be the only way and must be used carefully. In fact, in many cases, such identification from the society plays a disappointing role in self-definition.
Admittedly, it is efficient and simple to use labels of one’s social group that have labeled on it when you want to quickly get a general impression of someone. Besides, it has become common sense for this society. when people want a positive definition of themselves, they tend to gain praise from their social groups. they try their best to get approval or even envy, because only by that can they regard themselves as successful and meaningful. At school, students would study hard to get an A from teachers to prove themselves; in the workplace, some employees would like to work hard and even sacrifice their free time and health to get approval from their colleagues and employers. As we can see, such self-definition as its virtue, since it galvanizes people to chase the predominance and boost the activity throughout the society. In fact, our ultimate ambitions to gain wealth, fame and beauty come from the desire to be recognized by the society.
however when extreme, many side-effects would appear. that is to say, when people only use the social identification as the sole criterion, it sometimes can cause confusion and even destroy our proper definition. On the one hand, sometimes one social group would have an absurd and antediluvian evaluation standard for individuals. For example, in many rare villages in China, where the education resource is dreary and the gender crimination is intensive, ignorance would be considered as a virtue of women, so many parents would preclude girls from studying and let them learn doing housework instead. even if some girls had a desire to read and value knowledge it would be restrained by social norms of the whole group. it would be pathetic if they finally defer to such criterion and become approved women who are good at only being a housewife. therefore, it is extremely necessary not only to cater to social standards, but also to judge whether the external recognition is correct.
On the other hand, the identification with the society groups can be paradoxical and those whose self-definition depend solely on it would always feel uncertain of themselves. because of the diversity of people's thoughts and values, there are also great differences in the identification of a person, sometimes it is even totally opposite. For example, when a student chooses to sacrifice his or her extracurricular activities , they may get praise from her teacher but be disdained by classmates as bookish. such conflicts would cause people who want approval ^ get in a dilemma, which is that no matter how hard they try, they can hardly get the identification they want. if this situation continues, they would be unconfident and finally feel desperate about their life.
having said all this, I don't mean to completely identify with social groups, but to say that we should use it as a supplement to our self-definition. so what is the most important? it is our own mind. being confident is the first step, and such confidence requires a deep perception of this world, a strong and independent ego and the correct establishment of outlook on life and values. Then we can use the labels we get from the outside to timely evaluate ourselves and sometimes we learn from them and make some revision, but most importantly, let your spirit truly define who you are.
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also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, while, for example, in fact, in many cases, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 33.0505617978 215% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3275.0 2235.4752809 147% => OK
No of words: 652.0 442.535393258 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02300613497 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05314661074 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92893610128 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 320.0 215.323595506 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490797546012 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 1033.2 704.065955056 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.10617977528 386% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1829862407 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.931034483 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4827586207 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44827586207 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 26.0 7.80617977528 333% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203891672796 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583750283233 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651039303916 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133378926326 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700057306146 0.0667264976115 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 100.480337079 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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