Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
Nature’s Way (NW) stated that opening a new store, selling health food and health-related products, in Plainsville would be lucrative, based on three main facts in this area: 1). The high profit of exercise-related shoes and clothing; 2).the increasing popularity of local health club; and 3). the policy that forced children to participate in a fitness program. Although true, these facts give no evidence to their conclusion.
Firstly, they believe the profit of their products has a high positive correlation to the local popularity of healthy lives, but such a view cannot bear scrutiny. In g...
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 604 350
No. of Characters: 3025 1500
No. of Different Words: 284 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.957 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.008 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.594 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 225 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 167 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 110 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.231 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.773 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.547 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 295, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...popularity of local health club; and 3. the policy that forced children to particip...
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Line 7, column 124, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this health' or 'Those healths'?
Suggestion: This health; Those healths
...love to buy healthy food in NW as well. Those health club members are just chasing the trend...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, still, third, thirdly, well, in fact, in general, in summary, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 28.8173652695 180% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3145.0 2260.96107784 139% => OK
No of words: 603.0 441.139720559 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21558872305 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9554069778 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73218543093 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 204.123752495 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487562189055 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 946.8 705.55239521 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 4.96107784431 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.532091978 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.481481481 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.40740740741 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.20758483034 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195664297295 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576551320505 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701012442973 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108904585233 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602452944254 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 98.500998004 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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