Some people say that the best way to raise children is to encourage them to be independent thinkers. Others disagree and say that children need to be taught discipline in order to become successful. Using specific examples, discuss these two opinions. State which one you agree with and why?
Childhood is one the most important periods of any persons’ life. Humans most significant attitudes and behavioral attributes are shaped in this short but determining time. Some parents believe that children must be treated with discipline and strict rules to be successful in future. However, some others think letting the off springs to have more freedom of choice and independency would benefit them more. In my view, I guess raising the children as independent thinkers can help them more in their future life ahead because of some reasons which I am going to mention here.
First, raising the children as independent minds would assist them to decide in crucial moments of their life. When you let your son or daughter to decide about a matter that your family has confronted with, you are showing indirectly that he or she is also an important member of the team and their say worth something. This can consequently benefit them when they face with a problem of their own and parents are not there to decide emplace of them. But, if their parents practice these sorts of situations with them during their childhood, they can easily deal with it and come up with an appropriate solution to solve it. For example, I myself have experienced this kind of condition in many occasions of my life, since my parents forced me to think about the right thing to do in every situation I experienced in my childhood. Generally, I would not saw any reason why they were doing this and found it always annoying. However, now that I grew up, I can clearly understand why my parents were doing that things since now I am using it in my own son.
Another main reason about this is because of the creativity it brings with itself normally. When you have to choose for yourself without any body else assist, it may seem akward at first but it pushes you to use your own imagination to come up with a few novel pathways to solve your problem since there is not any person to do it for you. For instance, my friend Jimmy never liked to be present in most of the math classes but our teacher was so clever and remember who cut the classes in the middle. After one or two session he was tired of sitting bored in math class so decided to do something about it. He taped himself in a recorder and gave it to me to play it when our math teacher called his name. So as you can see children can solve their own problems and coorect their mistakes if they may be provided with enough space to act.
In sum, raising children in the best way it could happen is one the parents challenging duties. Some of them may use difficult measures for their treatment where some others give the children the time and space to learn and decide for themselves independently. With these reasons I believe any parents can easily know which one of those can coach the children in the long run.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...classes in the middle. After one or two session he was tired of sitting bored in math c...
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...about it. He taped himself in a recorder and gave it to me to play it when our ma...
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...ny parents can easily know which one of those can coach the children in the long run.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, so, for example, for instance, i guess, kind of, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 85.0 43.0788530466 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2352.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55813953488 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43137282696 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496124031008 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5323903114 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19047619048 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158702284428 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541017518854 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582883837986 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120702055542 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623137148893 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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